3 Writing Goals:
1.) Improve introduction of evidence
I hope to improve how I introduce evidence into my paragraphs. Doing this will make my paragraphs better built and more practical. “In a TED talk video entitled, "When performing gets in the way of improving", Eduardo Briceno states, “Once we think we’ve become good enough, adequate, then, we stop spending time in the learning zone. We focus all of our time on just doing our job, performing”.” I think I just need to put more time into introducing evidence and using the author's name in an appropriate way.
2.) Develop more thought-out thesis statements
I want to get better at developing better thought out thesis statements that will connect to all paragraphs and better introduce my main idea for the rest of the essay. “Think of a classroom environment where students are independent, self sufficient, mature and fully aware of their surroundings and other peers. Moreover think of a classroom that has a well-rounded community, students and teachers respect each other and there is a support system for everyone. Both of these things sound great, as well as fully achievable. Yet, for either of these things to happen, it must be acknowledged that neither of them can happen without the work and commitment from each individual in the classroom.” I need to first develop a thesis that better emcompasses my thoughts for the rest of the essay, and second, create a more succinct idea of what I’m trying to say in a beautifully written way.
3.) More analysis or personal experience implemented
I feel that in a lot of my essays I need add more personal experience or voice into my evidence. I want to try to better implement this into my essays to make them more personal and unique. “The thing that differentiates the learning vs. performance zone is whether you're in an environment in which you can mess up and learn from mistakes or if you’re deliberately doing a task that may put something at stake, where you are using skills prior learned from your learning zone experiences. The use and implementation of both of these “zones” into the classroom environment will help students recognize when they are able to learn, ask questions, and grow, and when they are needing to be functioning and “performing” to their highest standard.” At the end of this paragraph I could have implemented some of my personal experience into this part. I want to work on this by brainstorming experiences I could implement into my evidence in order to better analyze and add personal voice.
I hope to improve how I introduce evidence into my paragraphs. Doing this will make my paragraphs better built and more practical. “In a TED talk video entitled, "When performing gets in the way of improving", Eduardo Briceno states, “Once we think we’ve become good enough, adequate, then, we stop spending time in the learning zone. We focus all of our time on just doing our job, performing”.” I think I just need to put more time into introducing evidence and using the author's name in an appropriate way.
2.) Develop more thought-out thesis statements
I want to get better at developing better thought out thesis statements that will connect to all paragraphs and better introduce my main idea for the rest of the essay. “Think of a classroom environment where students are independent, self sufficient, mature and fully aware of their surroundings and other peers. Moreover think of a classroom that has a well-rounded community, students and teachers respect each other and there is a support system for everyone. Both of these things sound great, as well as fully achievable. Yet, for either of these things to happen, it must be acknowledged that neither of them can happen without the work and commitment from each individual in the classroom.” I need to first develop a thesis that better emcompasses my thoughts for the rest of the essay, and second, create a more succinct idea of what I’m trying to say in a beautifully written way.
3.) More analysis or personal experience implemented
I feel that in a lot of my essays I need add more personal experience or voice into my evidence. I want to try to better implement this into my essays to make them more personal and unique. “The thing that differentiates the learning vs. performance zone is whether you're in an environment in which you can mess up and learn from mistakes or if you’re deliberately doing a task that may put something at stake, where you are using skills prior learned from your learning zone experiences. The use and implementation of both of these “zones” into the classroom environment will help students recognize when they are able to learn, ask questions, and grow, and when they are needing to be functioning and “performing” to their highest standard.” At the end of this paragraph I could have implemented some of my personal experience into this part. I want to work on this by brainstorming experiences I could implement into my evidence in order to better analyze and add personal voice.